Tuesday, April 8, 2014
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I object to violence because when it appears to do good,the evil it does is permanent. -Mahatma Gandhi.This quote means that once you do something bad in violence is gonna stay permanent in your life.I agree with this quote because when you commit a crime its gonna stay in your permanent record and all the jobs you apply they will know you are violent. It can be clearly seen in I,Michael Bennett by James Patterson when the NYPD,FBI, and DEA are trying to capture a Mexican drug dealer that has killed a lot of innocent people.
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You need to put quotes around the quote. You have the correct structure, but your missing the three main points for your last sentence. You did a good job in not writing in 1st person. You just need to give more examples, and description. You also need to list the three thesis points. But good start.
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